Overall I think you have really grasped a solid understanding for how to use the 4 technical elements together to create suspense and tension in a thriller sequence.
- I like your beginning, having the sound effect of the bike before seeing it was clever and worked well. - the blue hue over the outside shots took the edge off the bright and sunny outdoors which didn't really fit as a thriller convention. It gave your film a slightly sinister feel which was great. - sound-wise, the music you chose worked well to build suspense but I feel even this could have been played with a but more to get the maximum tension building out of it. Potentially a change in pace/ music when the scene changes or music which builds a bit more could have added to your footage? - editing-wise, be careful to edit in a way that the actions are continuous and flow well. The mafia guy walking up to the door and then the next shot of him stopped dead is a bit jolting and that second shot needs him walking to a stop, just to make the movement continuous (match-on-action). - sound-wise I think your film could have been improved with the use of recording the proper sound and adding in sound effects as an added-extra. Having no ambient noise and then problems with the sound levels when there is dialogue detracts from the tension because it breaks the verisimilitude of the sequence. - sound effects were appropriate and matched well. - I enjoyed the shot where your antagonist walks into the light and you had a silhouette shot, this was well done. - I also think it is effective lighting technique that you made the inside of the warehouse darker than it really was, in post-production. This created a dark, eery, concealed space where the viewer doesn't know what's about to take place, as though it's a space where something 'dark and sinister' is about to take place. - I like the smoke effect as the door is opened and it adds a nice touch of mystique although a nice effect, perhaps not overly realistic? Would there have been smoke in the warehouse? Maybe more stage/theatre than reality. - I also think the effect for the digital hitch effect is cleverly done but unless you are creating a technno-thriller (a film about robots/ technology/ the dark net), this doesn't really add to the suspense but rather hints at a different sub genre altogether. - The red hue is effective and creates a new space which screams danger. - With camera angles, it would be great to see you use a mixture of angles to demonstrate their effect. Especially having had a terrified victim, a close-up could have been a great demonstration of how to use an angle to convey emotion and fear. A close up of the victim could have also highlighted his wounds and added to his state of being so we are introduced to him better. - It was great to see you attempt to do low angles and high angles in the conversation scene but this could have been exaggerated more to demonstrate your knowledge and understanding of shots emphasising power and authority in the narrative. - Mise-en-scene needs a little more attention to detail too, when on camera, it is important to have a clear understanding of what is in your shot before you start filming. Getting the lights on camera weren't too distracting but detracted slightly from the verisimilitude of the scene. - The film is also missing your film name/ title - I am looking forward to seeing you put some thought and creativity into your title and credits for your next PT to reflect the tone, theme and idea of your film sequence. - overall a well thought-out first attempt at creating a thriller genre film sequence.
Technical Requirements Shot-reverse-shot - this needs a bit more attention to detail. The shot needs to be the point of view of the viewer and then reversed, this could be a straight point of view shot or an over the shoulder shot. The shot you used to demonstrate this was off to the side and showing both subjects. 180' Rule: this was adhered to and continuity was maintained in camera position, well done. Match-on-action - the walking into the garage scene and then cutting to the shot of the main character walking away from us into the light was well edited and maintained continuity.
Hi Addison
ReplyDeleteOverall Score: 14/20
Comments:
Overall I think you have really grasped a solid understanding for how to use the 4 technical elements together to create suspense and tension in a thriller sequence.
- I like your beginning, having the sound effect of the bike before seeing it was clever and worked well.
- the blue hue over the outside shots took the edge off the bright and sunny outdoors which didn't really fit as a thriller convention. It gave your film a slightly sinister feel which was great.
- sound-wise, the music you chose worked well to build suspense but I feel even this could have been played with a but more to get the maximum tension building out of it. Potentially a change in pace/ music when the scene changes or music which builds a bit more could have added to your footage?
- editing-wise, be careful to edit in a way that the actions are continuous and flow well. The mafia guy walking up to the door and then the next shot of him stopped dead is a bit jolting and that second shot needs him walking to a stop, just to make the movement continuous (match-on-action).
- sound-wise I think your film could have been improved with the use of recording the proper sound and adding in sound effects as an added-extra. Having no ambient noise and then problems with the sound levels when there is dialogue detracts from the tension because it breaks the verisimilitude of the sequence.
- sound effects were appropriate and matched well.
- I enjoyed the shot where your antagonist walks into the light and you had a silhouette shot, this was well done.
- I also think it is effective lighting technique that you made the inside of the warehouse darker than it really was, in post-production. This created a dark, eery, concealed space where the viewer doesn't know what's about to take place, as though it's a space where something 'dark and sinister' is about to take place.
- I like the smoke effect as the door is opened and it adds a nice touch of mystique although a nice effect, perhaps not overly realistic? Would there have been smoke in the warehouse? Maybe more stage/theatre than reality.
- I also think the effect for the digital hitch effect is cleverly done but unless you are creating a technno-thriller (a film about robots/ technology/ the dark net), this doesn't really add to the suspense but rather hints at a different sub genre altogether.
- The red hue is effective and creates a new space which screams danger.
- With camera angles, it would be great to see you use a mixture of angles to demonstrate their effect. Especially having had a terrified victim, a close-up could have been a great demonstration of how to use an angle to convey emotion and fear. A close up of the victim could have also highlighted his wounds and added to his state of being so we are introduced to him better.
- It was great to see you attempt to do low angles and high angles in the conversation scene but this could have been exaggerated more to demonstrate your knowledge and understanding of shots emphasising power and authority in the narrative.
- Mise-en-scene needs a little more attention to detail too, when on camera, it is important to have a clear understanding of what is in your shot before you start filming. Getting the lights on camera weren't too distracting but detracted slightly from the verisimilitude of the scene.
- The film is also missing your film name/ title
- I am looking forward to seeing you put some thought and creativity into your title and credits for your next PT to reflect the tone, theme and idea of your film sequence.
- overall a well thought-out first attempt at creating a thriller genre film sequence.
ReplyDeleteTechnical Requirements
Shot-reverse-shot - this needs a bit more attention to detail. The shot needs to be the point of view of the viewer and then reversed, this could be a straight point of view shot or an over the shoulder shot. The shot you used to demonstrate this was off to the side and showing both subjects.
180' Rule: this was adhered to and continuity was maintained in camera position, well done.
Match-on-action - the walking into the garage scene and then cutting to the shot of the main character walking away from us into the light was well edited and maintained continuity.